A long long time ago in a land where animals ruled the world, two unlikely animal kingdoms formed a great alliance. It had been fifty years since the Poultry Kingdom had fallen to the reptiles, and the world had been pushed into the dark ages. If you weren't a reptile, life was very hard.
The Canine and Feline Kingdoms were the only ones left after the reptiles ravaged the Barn Yard continent.
"Something has to be done about the reptiles before they completely destroy our homes and way of life," King Cat said to Queen Dog.
"We must work together to insure both of our kingdoms don't come crashing down like the Poultry Kingdom so long ago," Queen dog demanded.
"We will fight to the death if we have to," King Cat declared!
King Cat and Queen Dog decided to come together to bring the great people of the Barn Yard continent out of the dark ages and banish the reptiles to the jungles.
It took several years, but the Canine and Feline Kingdoms finally took control over the reptiles and banished them to the jungles of the world.
A problem arose when the kingdoms decided to split the land. King Cat thought he deserved more land since he spend more than Queen Dog, but Queen Dog thought she deserved more land because she had lost more soldiers during the fight.
The intense negotiations went on for months. The arguments became more and more tense. The two allies started to hate each other. Their egos got in the way of a great power house.
The reptiles heard of the conflict between the ruling kingdoms and decided to take advantage of the situation. They started sabotaging each kingdom making it look like the other kingdom had done the dirty work. Pretty soon the reptiles had each kingdom ready to go to war with each other.
One cold winter night, the Feline Kingdom decided to attack the Canines. This started a chain of events that that would lead to a millennia of war and hate between the two kingdoms. The reptiles would watch and wait for the right time to take over their rule again of the Barn Yard continent.
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Author's Note: My story is very loosely based off The Quarrel of the Cat and Dog. I also tied this story in with my first story The Poultry Kingdom. I wanted to try and continue the story and challenge myself to combine the two. I hope to continue the story of the Barn Yard Continent.
Bibliography:
Book: Jewish Fairy Tales and Legends
Author: Gertrude Landa
Year: 1919
Hey Dylan!
ReplyDeleteWow! You have quite the imagination! I loved your story and the way you told it. It was really different than anything i have read thus far. Your choice of characters and setting is really cool and thoughtful. I think that it is a really good idea to continue your story each week. I'll have to stay posted on what happens to the Barn Yard continent :)
I though it was really neat that you wove two stories together! I read The Quarrel of the Cat and Dog on week 2, and your take on it was drastically different but very well done. The original story was quite sad, but I liked how you focused on the reptiles as the cause of the disagreements. Hopefully, you can continue the story throughout the semester! I look forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteHi Dylan! What an interesting way to tell a story! To echo Brionna, it is unlike anything that I have read in this class before. Your website layout looks like the stacks at OU, so I like it a lot! Also, your hyperlinks work within your story, which is always a plus.
ReplyDeleteJust a few suggestions from me, to help improve your writing and such in the future! One, I always suggest to people to do a quick grammar check to see if any punctuation and such has been left out. Two, for this story, I agree with the choice of photo, but I would have put it before the paragraph that starts off with "The reptiles heard of..." It just helps to illustrate how the cats and dogs started to hate each other.
Overall, great job being able to tie all of your storytelling stories together and for keeping your blog neat and tidy!
I like your story a lot. It kind of reminded me of Animal Farm by George Orwell. I enjoyed reading about how you made the different types of animals into different countries and made them have conflicts between one another to take over the land and to even deceive one another so that their own group or country might win. I like the picture you chose to give a visual idea of the conflict going on between the cats and dogs. It's a great idea and very creative to link each story every week that will present a good challenge and will be interesting to follow. There are a few things you could've done better though. There are a few grammar mistakes in the story. Also you might space each paragraph to just be easier to read and follow along while making fewer, bigger paragraphs. Other than that it was a great story to read!
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ReplyDeleteGreat story! Your creativity really shows through your writing style. I can definitely hear your voice throughout the entire story and appreciate how you manipulated the two stories to make them one. Overall, you did a fantastic job.
The things I would change are few in number. One would be to read over the story for any grammar mistakes. This is simple to do, but necessary! It's easy to overlook things sometimes.
I appreciate that you have multiple paragraphs. It makes the story easy to read and follow. Having an extra space between these paragraphs would help even more.
The fonts and colors made the story easy to read. Great job on that!
Your image pulls the story together. However, checking to make sure words are spelled correctly is important.
The links that you include work and are valid, but I would have liked to see a link in the bibliography as well. This would be especially helpful for the longer blog posts.
Overall, great job! I enjoyed reading your story and can't wait to read more in the future.
I liked the playful feel of the story with a few hints of mature content in deception, manipulation and war - but with barn yard animals, reptiles, dogs and cats. One little fix I found, in the sentence "King Cat thought he deserved more land since he spend more than Queen Dog" change spend to spent? Keep up the story grind lol, good stuff.
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